Review of the First Post

Thank you for the opportunity to read "Steampunk and Desktops." Overall I really like your blog entry. But for the sake of review, I'll discuss what didn't work as well in your post. For starters, the last paragraph just doesn't seem to flow very well. I think if the explanation of steampunk was its own paragraph and then the next paragraph be used to go into the components of the computer that resemble that "style" would not have been as awkward. The actual topic itself is very interesting though. I don't know how useful a computer like that would be for gaming, but the ascetic value alone makes it interesting. The second part of the second paragraph just seems out of place. The rest of the post isn't about how "intuitive" it is to use the machines so it seems like the addition of the text in the parentheses is just unnecessary. I enjoyed how you compared paying to make a computer to look old to buying jeans that are already ripped. I did like your writing style, it was mostly clear and interesting (unless otherwise noted). Well.....this is tough to critique my instructor, but I have enjoyed this and thanks for a good quarter. :)